This took a lot of sand to put up on this site, and I applaud you!
You talk about 'brushing' a turn.... is that another way of saying you (skidded)? GASP!
Having read your (and others) PMTS postings for some time, I had always been curious how you would actually ski.
You have a solid set of fundamentals, and a decent sense of timing. The skiing was really not bad! There were times it looked contrived, or postured, and I could almost hear you thinking about each turn!
I was quite suprised to see the amount of active rotary tension in the legs! Though perhaps you didn't 'pivot' your legs, that tension certainly facilitates a tighter arc then the ski itself can achieve!
If there is one single thing that I might suggest to make you smoother and even more effective, that would be to alter your pole touch timing.
You currently touch prior to the completion of the edge change/release, and it gets in your way as a result. You will not pass as smoothly across the skis if there is an obstacle in your path. Watch HH closely, and you will see his touch occurs after the edge change/release. You should also feel less jarring in the arms/ shoulders as a result.
Other than that, your skills are quite good! I would expect to see that level of skill / performance in a good Level 2 instr candidate.
By the way- Vail is hiring... want a job?