Time for last one update to this MA. A few weeks ago, I had an excellent lesson with @LiquidFeet. The three big things that came out of the lesson were upper lower body separation (she said I should pull back the outside hip and feel a pinch, I think this is the best thing I've been able to keep since the lesson), pulling the inside leg/foot back (do I have less tip lead?), and planting the poll earlier (she wanted me to plant at the end of the turn).
So how am I doing now? I think it's a pretty good improvement from the first videos in this thread. If there's one thing I would critique is that it looks like the top of the turn looks rushed. I'm partially going to blame that on the ice. I think it is something I do commonly though.