^I guess I should back up my advice with some examples?
Last year was my first with the GoPro, but not my first year editing footage. I primarily used the chest mount, but immediately found that I needed B-roll to keep the eye interested. I accomplished this with a bunch of still shots, and put some motion tracking on them which I think also helped. What you want to avoid is cutting to/from the same camera angle repeatedly. A quick dissolve, or my favorite, the zoom/dissolve help break up the monotony. I see you cut in some fixed position shots of your daughter from the chesty, between some of the moving POV shots. This is a step in the right direction.
Here's a quicky from a trip to St Anton last year. The skiing footage is pretty unremarkable IMO, but I think the overall content and pacing is decent, and watching it makes me want to go back every time, so mission accomplished!
Make sure to view in HD if you have a choice.
This year I've been playing more with mounting positions, including the dreaded pole-cam selfie, and some following shots that take a fair amount of concentration and luck to get right. The twister shot was a fluke, but a positive by-product of experimentation.
I'm pleased with the way this one turned out, but had to run more compression on the output than I would have liked to keep it under the file size restrictions on vimeo with a free membership. I'm opposed to the idea of paying for the privilage of posting my crappy vids on the interwebz, but YouTube disabled the video due to copyrighted music, so the more compressed vimeo version is the only one I can link here. Enjoy!
Edited by MT Skull - 3/15/14 at 9:12pm